Love by the River

By morning when the birds chanted,
I hid among the thickets and waited;
withheld my breath, never panted,
waited with anxiety and the desire to possess –
only the crickets creaked their noises
and a bird-call twined the air;
thought, was somewhere a bird baited?

Then luckily I saw her pass by,
I saw Rayleanne and made a sigh;
did my eyes to me lie?
Blinked and looked, heart pounded warmly:
what a smashing beauty o really!
silky young silvery shanks,
Uncomparable to my spindle shanks.

It was not lust that made my bones rattle;
’twas beauty and love at my doorsil for battle.
The length between us was like a wattle,
and she moved down crooning,
looking beautiful, radiant and charming;
Sure, in that skater she was cutting a dash
with every quick blink and flash.

As she filled her small barrel,
I stood and made to move a muscle,
but a breaking twig broke up the silence;
she turned, peered towards my direction –
dropped her barrel and began to cry,
my charming Ray,
so softly, I compared her tears to the gushing river
and saw true love, true heart in it.

🌷🌷🌷

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32 Comments

  1. Mike U. says:

    Goodness, Lamittan, this is really a stunning piece of poetry. Your descriptions, your imagery, your emotions…I felt as though I were right there at that very moment. This is amazingly good writing! πŸ™‚

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    1. Thank you so much, Mike my friend. What a noble, gratifying and precise comment! I’m very much pleased you enjoyed it. πŸ˜€πŸ€

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  2. Wic says:

    Yeah, this was a good piece filled with feelings. Keep writing ✍️

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    1. Many thanks to you, Wic. I’m absolutely jovial you enjoyed this piece. Thanks for the encouragement too.

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  3. A captivating poem about beauty and love, Lamittan. You took me to the river with you. πŸ™‚

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    1. I did? Oh wow, D. Wallace, ain’t that heart-warming of you to say! I’m very glad you enjoyed this piece. Many thanks to you for leaving such a noble compliment. πŸ™

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  4. What a gorgeous piece. I truly love it.

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    1. Thanks for taking your time to read and make such a gratifying comment, Gabriela. I’m pleased you loved and found it gorgeous, dear. ❀

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      1. My pleasure. It is gorgeous. Your entire poetry is superb.

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      2. It certainly warms the cockles of my heart to hear so, especially from a renowned author like you. Much grateful indeed!

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      3. You are too kind and I love your poems so you will hear more from me.

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      4. Oh thank you so much again for such great news. Of course it’d be my utmost joy and pleasure to hear from you again, dear. Such an honour to me indeed!!

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      5. 🌺🌸🌹❀️

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  5. Such a beautiful poem Lamittan that you wove so beautifully!
    A treasured piece intertwining nature and love which felt deeply and capturing.
    Love these lines!
    πŸ’–πŸ’–πŸ’–

    “I stood and made to move a muscle,
    but a breaking twig broke up the silence;
    she turned, peered towards my direction –
    dropped her barrel and began to cry,
    my charming Ray,
    so softly, I compared her tears to the gushing river
    and saw true love, true heart in it.

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    1. Cindy, you truly are a charming person. Your review have a special place in my heart, dear. The moment I see them, my heart just leaps with joy. Many thanks for reading and leaving such noteworthy compliments. πŸ’–πŸŒ·πŸ’–

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      1. Oh thanks my friend! A nice thing to take in my heart on a break today. I have mutual admiration for you as well! Awww well, I’m a leap year baby so it’s no surprise.. hahah 🀣 and now I’m leaping to the next client and know it’s a pleasure to share my thoughts with you always!πŸ’–

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      2. Leap year baby, wow 🀣🀣, many thanks to you, dear, and welcome always. πŸ’–

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      3. πŸ₯°πŸ™πŸ˜˜

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  6. Jeff Flesch says:

    A gorgeous poem, Lamittan. The flow, language, and feelings resonate. Beautiful, my dear friend. πŸ’–πŸ’–

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    1. Oh thank you so much, Jeff. πŸ’– I’m completely overjoyed that you, my endeared friend, found this beautiful and smooth in flow. Your words touch the heart with rare warmth. Ever so grateful, buddy. πŸ’–πŸ’–

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      1. Jeff Flesch says:

        You’re most welcome, Lamittan. Always. I’m glad this is so; it’s a real beauty. πŸ’–πŸ’–πŸ’–

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      2. Many thanks, Jeff πŸ˜ŠπŸ’–πŸ’–πŸ’–

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  7. Daphny Aqua says:

    Lam this poem is captivating, how gorgeous it is. I love this love story. πŸ’–πŸ’–πŸ’–πŸ’–

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    1. Thanks, Daph dear. I’m glad you enjoyed this piece. πŸ’–πŸ’–πŸ’–πŸ’–

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      1. Daphny Aqua says:

        You’re most welcome Lam! I thought it was fantastic. ❀️

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      2. Delighted to hear so dear. ❀😊😘

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      3. Daphny Aqua says:

        πŸ€—πŸ’–

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  8. Athira says:

    Keep writing βœπŸ»πŸ‘πŸ»

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    1. Thanks you so much for the encouragement. I’ll certainly do. 🌺

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      1. Athira says:

        πŸ‘πŸ»

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